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Teen angst is inert;
burned out and faded away.
I thought it would hurt,
but it's caused me no pain.
You may come as you were,
but you won't sound the same.

With the lights on, it's less dangerous;
here we are now,
time has aged us.
We were stupid,
and contageous,
we are here now,
but time has changed us.

Pointless defiance is insignificant;
while dead rebels lead no cause.
Apathy precedes the discontent,
in which this era ends.
This we must accept,
no more time to pretend.

With the lights on, it's less dangerous;
here we are now,
time made us.
My first real piece of work in more than a year, almost two to be honest. There is something to be said about the first piece of writing after a long drought; but I wouldn't call it satisfaction, more or less it is relief that it eventually came.

This deals with some things I have been thinking about the past few months, likely iniated by my changed musical preference. The influence of the second stanza should be obvious to most people, as well as some references in the first. I don't know if this will make sense to many of you, but it does to me. I may have to do something to edit it, and I hope any problems are commented on, as I want to improve.

Humble Thanks,
-gh
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PercipientFish Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2009  Student Artist
THANK YOU! Good God I wan wondering when someone would give a good roundhouse slap to every stupid teenager out there. >< I'm a teenager too, but I know that being defiant against any adult, let alone your parents, for no good reason is just stupid. Very flowing, and the number of syllables in each line is just right.
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ghbatt Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2009
Belated thanks
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Julia237 Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2008
Absolutely amazing. Your punctuation is phonomenal. I suck at it when I write poetry. Everything seemed correct no big mistakes that I can see. :clap:
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ghbatt Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2009
belated thanks
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Julia237 Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2009
Welcome.
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bassofwww Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2008
hey dude
long ago (start of january) you liked a writing of mine and you suggested checking yours out and i said yes and meant to then forgot then i saw the comment later and i was like crap
so im checking things out now lol sorry
and so far im impressed :D
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SeaOfThoughts Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2008
great job, beautifully written.
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hilaryLEA Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2008   Photographer
This is really easy to relate to.
It's an excellent piece and describes teen angst with lots of light shed in it.
Good job!
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ghbatt Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2008
Thanks! I really think this is my last poem of that genre
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77th-Brigade Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2008
Love it, love the reference, awesome poem.
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